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Let ivy grow over my grave.
Let God make my body
a joy, a beauty; and a testament
to His power.
Make a place for birds to
nest in my headstone,
so that I may look back
and see new life
following my own.

20.9.2006
title says all. please bear with me on the typos... different keyboard...
EDIT: fixed the typos
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TTBranwen Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
This is a very pretty little poem. After much thought though, I've decided that I don't like the last three lines; they're explaining too much. I LOVE the image of a birdnest in the headstone, and I was thinking maybe adding another think kinda like that would be much more effective than the urrent last-three-lines at getting the point across. Birds in the headstone and a rabbit in the grass, maybe?
Pretty, pretty, pretty. :glomp:
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